Can I write rhymes?
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willywanker
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in Roc Tha Mic
Every day I represent, paying rent leaves my wallet with a dent
before it comes it's spent, every cent like I gave it up for lent
Still I repent then repeat, then repent then repeat
success I'm trying to greet, no surrender no retreat
Am I any good?
before it comes it's spent, every cent like I gave it up for lent
Still I repent then repeat, then repent then repeat
success I'm trying to greet, no surrender no retreat
Am I any good?
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it was coo....i think delivery would play a great deal on the capacity of dopeness
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The message is there honestly it's just what you do with it to make yourself stand out. I remember writing like this when I just started. Try adding a bit more detail and expand on it some more. The foundations there tho.
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? sounding like green eggs and ham
Dr. Suess ass ? . -
Thanks for the feedback guys, yep delivery will be vital with a style like this, been experimenting with different styles lately.
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Plus the last line was rushed I was stoned and just wanted to post something, got some heat in my notebook but don't wanna post incase it gets stolen.
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that was pretty good bro
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Keep writing
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Thanks guys appreciate it.
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Keep rapping,
You ain't ready cause ya flow wack
I can tell you tryna be the next white rapper,
Listen to my boy cappa- dona,
I'm from the state we call zona!